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Permalink Reply by Julie Am on June 16, 2014 at 4:57pm

Hi Elena,

First of all, I love the content of this article and the energy behind it.  This is a very important message in that every relationship, good or bad, is a learning experience.  Looking for the lessons to be learned particularly in the parent/child relationship can clear up so much in the way of patterns and perspectives carried on through life.

Perhaps, though, I can offer some helpful tips in your delivery of this beautiful and healing message.  There is a bit of an issue with readability.  If you were perhaps to break up some of the long sentences and paragraphs, it would make the article much more reader-friendly.  And, there are a few grammar issues that can be very easily cleaned up. 

Other than that, this is a wonderful article on a topic that will provide so many with the healing and direction they seek.  Thank you so much for sharing this with the world.

Many Blessings,

Julie

Permalink Reply by Trevor Taylor on June 17, 2014 at 3:42am

Hi Elena, thank you for posting this. I agree with Julie in her advice. What I would like to add is that you will need to look at grammar issues.  You leave out alot of 'a's', eg from 'spiritual point of view' should read from 'a spiritual point of view'. This happens alot in you narrative. And, also, singular, plural issues, eg 'why we often marry partners who is so similar should read 'who are so similar'. And as Julie says, Paragraph structure is so essential for a good article.  Steer away from the first person - articles need to be written in the third person. And don't forget to add a brief BIO. You do have potential to write good articles for the magazine, but the issues identified by Julie, and by me, are essential for a good, readable article. Well, having said that, wishing you good luck with your writings. Trevor

Permalink Reply by Elena Makarova on June 21, 2014 at 2:07pm

Dear Julie and Trevor,

thank you very much for your feedback!

English is still my challenge and I will think what I can do to prevent such mistakes in the future.

I will work on my style and your specific comments are very important! So happy to be part of that community. 

What do you think, should I edit this article to have more chanes to have it posted or should I write new one?

Warm regards!

Elena

Permalink Reply by Trevor Taylor on June 22, 2014 at 3:12am

Hi Elena. Whichever you feel comfortable with, re-working this article or starting afresh with a new article. Remember to write a clear introductory paragraph that introduces the reader to your message (main article content) and a conclusion that neatly summarises what you are saying in the article, and at the same time reinforces the message of your article. And include a brief BIO, please, at the end. Good luck with your writings, Trevor